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I\'m so sensitive to the weather. So whenever I planned to go to a picnic, I would check the weather on the picnic day whether it\'s raining or it\'s warm or cold. I would prefer camping out than the campsite if the weather is good. I can decide where to stay freely in camping out. Before writing, I don\'t know the word \'camp out\', so I searched that word. The word \'camp out\' means not only for camping but for waiting outside to see a concert. There are so many people waiting so you should spend time on a mat.
For example, when the apple store was opened in korea at first, so many people are camping out to buy a new iPhone.
강사 첨삭
Hi John!
See what wonders simplicity could do.
This is a very good composition.
The sentences were direct and easy to understand.
I hope you keep it up.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I\'m so sensitive to the weather.
>> I\'m so sensitive when it comes to weather.
So whenever I planned to go to a picnic, I would check the weather on the picnic day whether it\'s raining or it\'s warm or cold.
>> Correct
I would prefer camping out than the campsite if the weather is good.
>> Correct
I can decide where to stay freely in camping out.
>> Correct
Before writing, I don\'t know the word \'camp out\', so I searched that word.
>> Before writing, I didn\'t know the word \'camp out\', so I searched that word.
The word \'camp out\' means not only for camping but for waiting outside to see a concert.
>> Correct
There are so many people waiting so you should spend time on a mat.
>> Correct
For example, when the apple store was opened in korea at first, so many people are camping out to buy a new iPhone.
For example, when the apple store was opened in korea at first, so many people are camping out to buy a new iPhone.
>> For example, when the Apple store was opened in Korea for the first time, so many people camped out to buy a new iPhone.
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