Camping!
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When i go to camping with my family. I saw fire bruises. It was very warm and little scaring. A few minutes later i and my younger sisters ate Marshmallow, Han River ramen and Jjondeugi.
It was very delicious. However burned to Marshmallow and Jjondeugi that is very difficult. Although the weather was cold, I spent happy day with my family.!!!
p.s teacher! My cold got worse, so was out of my voice , so i don’t take today class.. sorry..
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Hi, Chloe!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
~ T. CamilleWhen i go to camping with my family. I saw fire bruises.
>> When I went camping with my family, I saw fire embers.
It was very warm and little scaring.
>> It was very warm and a little scary.
A few minutes later i and my younger sisters ate Marshmallow, Han River ramen and Jjondeugi.
>> A few minutes later, my younger sisters and I ate Marshmallow, Han River ramen and Jjondeugi.
It was very delicious.
It was very delicious.
>> CORRECT!
However burned to Marshmallow and Jjondeugi that is very difficult.
>> However, I burned the Marshmallow and Jjondeugi because it was very difficult cooking it.
Although the weather was cold, I spent happy day with my family!!!
>> CORRECT!
p.s teacher! My cold got worse, so was out of my voice , so i don’t take today class.. sorry..
p.s teacher! My cold got worse, so was out of my voice , so i don’t take today class.. sorry..
[That\'s okay, I hope you get well soon! ^^ Take good care of yourself! :) ~ T. Camille ]
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