Can a tragedy or disaster help to promote community?
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Perfect composition, Sir [이름]!
How are you today? Do you feel better today than yesterday?
I hope you had something special today.
You are right, the people in the community should work hand in hand.
Living in a healthy and great community will make people happier.
See you in class.
Teacher Nina
When disaster or tragedy strikes, individuals and communities are stressed, they need help fast, and recovery may take a long time.
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We may fall into despair.
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However, tragic events often lead local people to cooperate and make sacrifice for the victims.
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When they happen, people become aware of the need for collaboration among community groups and the importance of mobilizing efforts of service providers to come together to address issues related to special populations and to the psychological recovery of all those affected.
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Although it is somewhat true that our community can be much stronger than before after a tragedy or disaster, it is more important that we have to make a plan together and start by working together before a disaster strikes to form a coalition.
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We should work beforehand to prevent for, respond to, and recover from any crisis rather than focus on addressing post-disaster needs.
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By doing that we can create and promote a more successful, healthier and resilient communit
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