Can alcohol cure stress temporarily?
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Many people rely on alcohol to relieve stress. It is the most common way for people to drink to get rid of stress although it is still arguable and controversial whether it is actually effective and helpful. Alcohol can work to make people forget temporarily the things that are on their mind. If the stress is stemmed from excessive workload, relationship with your manager or colleagues, or financial problem, you have to identify the root cause of the problem and solve the real issue. Otherwise, your problem will resurface again when you wake up the next morning. Drinking won’t cure your stress or anxiety permanently. When you have to drink because of stress, it’s better for you to drink together with your friends rather than drinking alone. At the gathering, talk a lot and share your story with your friends who can be on your side. Drinking alone carries a risk of heavier drinking, makes you feel more miserable and depressed, and can put you in a more difficult situation.
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Thanks you for doing your essay.
Oh my god! I\'m going to confess something hahaha.
I prefer to drink alone sometimes. Hihihi! Anyway, let us talk more about this in class.
Teacher Nina
Many people rely on alcohol to relieve stress.
>> Correct!
It is the most common way for people to drink to get rid of stress although it is still arguable and controversial whether it is actually effective and helpful.
>> Correct!
>> OR: It is the most common way for people to drink to get rid of stress. Although, it is still arguable and controversial whether it is actually effective and helpful.
Alcohol can work to make people forget temporarily the things that are on their mind.
>> Correct!
>> OR: Alcohol make people forget the things that bothers them.
If the stress is stemmed from excessive workload, relationship with your manager or colleagues, or financial problem, you have to identify the root cause of the problem and solve the real issue.
>> Correct!
Otherwise, your problem will resurface again when you wake up the next morning.
>> Correct!
>> OR: Otherwise, your problem will occur again when you wake up the next day.
Drinking won’t cure your stress or anxiety permanently.
>> Correct!
When you have to drink because of stress, it’s better for you to drink together with your friends rather than drinking alone.\\
>> Correct!
At the gathering, talk a lot and share your story with your friends who can be on your side.
>> Did you mean: During a gathering, talk a lot and share your story with your friends who can be on your side.
Drinking alone carries a risk of heavier drinking, makes you feel more miserable and depressed, and can put you in a more difficult situation.
>> Correct!
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