Can banning sweets, sodas, and fast food at schools promote better eating and health among school ki
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1. Students try to carry on water at school every day.
>> If sodas are banned in school, students will try to carry their own bottle of water to school everyday.
2. The plenty tickets to the students who had a sweet sodas and fast food.
>> DO YOU MEAN: Fine tickets should be given to students who eat sweet food and fast food or have sodas.
3.The pass tickets to the students who didn,t fast food and sodas during a week.
>> Pass tickets should be given to students who don\'t eat fast food or have sodas for a whole week.
4.The pass tickets one of got to the students get to the opportunity once,what one,s want to the choice.
>> A pass ticket should go to the student for following the rules so he/she could eat what he/she wants.
5.check the teacher final. Choice one person classmates.
>> DO YOU MEAN: The teacher should pair up the students to check on each other.
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