Can banning sweets, sodas, and fast food at schools promote better eating and health among school ki

2020-03-30 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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1. Students try to carry on water at school every day. 2. The plenty tickets to the students who had a sweet sodas and fast food. 3.The pass tickets to the students who didn,t fast food and sodas during a week. 4.The pass tickets one of got to the students get to the opportunity once,what one,s want to the choice. 5.check the teacher final. Choice one person classmates.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Ms. [이름]! ^_^
Thank you very much for finding the time to answer our homework last Friday.
You are awesome! ^^ Please continue practicing how to write essays. :)
See you again later. :)
~T. Charry


1. Students try to carry on water at school every day.
>> If sodas are banned in school, students will try to carry their own bottle of water to school everyday.
2. The plenty tickets to the students who had a sweet sodas and fast food.
>> DO YOU MEAN: Fine tickets should be given to students who eat sweet food and fast food or have sodas.
3.The pass tickets to the students who didn,t  fast food and sodas during a week.
>> Pass tickets should be given to students who don\'t eat fast food or have sodas for a whole week.
4.The pass tickets one of got to the students get to the opportunity once,what one,s want to the choice.

>> A pass ticket should go to the student for following the rules so he/she could eat what he/she wants.
5.check the teacher final. Choice one person classmates.

>> DO YOU MEAN: The teacher should pair up the students to check on each other.

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