Can knowledge be a burden rather than a benefit?

2016-01-27 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I don’t think knowledge could be a burden rather than a benefit. In short, knowledge can make our life more complex and complicated. We sometimes need simplicity rather than contemplating over trivial things. In ancient times, they could have enjoyed simple lives like going hunting when they hungry, sleeping and resting when there were nothing to do. They might not have to worry about studying and going to good college, although they could have other pains. Knowledge of negative events/facts can definitely be a burden especially when they are situations you do not have the power to change. Our pain grows and gets deeper because we know a lot about the consequence of our decisions and events. Our modern life is full of anxiety that couldn’t have existed in primitive times. The other cases are that our dreams or beliefs are fading away once we get to know about the reality. Good examples are childhood beliefs such as Santa Claus, imaginary friends, etc. It destroys childhood excitement

강사 첨삭

Great essay again, Sir [이름]!

You are right! Knowledge could be a burden at times.

I appreciate your time in writing all of your ideas.

It is really nice that you always allot time for composition/

See you.
Teacher Nina


I don’t think knowledge could be a burden rather than a benefit.

>> correct

In short, knowledge can make our life more complex and complicated.

>> correct

We sometimes need simplicity rather than contemplating over trivial things.

>> correct

In ancient times, they could have enjoyed simple lives like going hunting when they hungry, sleeping and resting when there were nothing to do.

>> correct

They might not have to worry about studying and going to good college, although they could have other pains.

>> correct

Knowledge of negative events/facts can definitely be a burden especially when they are situations you do not have the power to change.

>> Knowledge of negative events/facts can definitely be a burden especially when there are situations you do not have the power to change.

Our pain grows and gets deeper because we know a lot about the consequence of our decisions and events.

>> correct

Our modern life is full of anxiety that couldn’t have existed in primitive times.

>> correct

The other cases are that our dreams or beliefs are fading away once we get to know about the reality.

>> correct

Good examples are childhood beliefs such as Santa Claus, imaginary friends, etc.

>> correct

It destroys childhood excitement

>> correct

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