Can natural disasters ever be a good thing?
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Natural disasters bring us negative effects; People die or get hurt, Many personal properties or public facilities damage. Even though the same disasters happens on Earth repeatedly, we\'re not managed to control them yet. But it\'s also true that it provides us some benefits.
Typhoons are the one of these. After passing typhoons, the temperature of the surface drops and amount of freshwater is provided to us. It works like a circulating system. There is another one. Insects and bugs acting as carrier of disease which is fatal to many trees are vanished by forest fires. In addition, by removing weaker trees or dead wood by fires, remained plants can be nutritious and provided a more spacious place.
It\'s obvious natural disasters destroy many things relating to us and wild lives, but it\'s also an essential factor in some points. Natural disasters such as typhoons and forest fires have a power of circulation of our ecosystem to make Earth stronger so that is why it\'s a good thing for us.
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Can natural disasters ever be a good thing?
Natural disasters bring us negative effects; People die or get hurt, Many personal properties or public facilities damage.
>> Natural disasters bring us negative effects, such as people dying or getting hurt, many personal properties or public facilities getting damaged, and so on.
Even though the same disasters happens on Earth repeatedly, we\'re not managed to control them yet. But it\'s also true that it provides us some benefits.
>> Despite the regular occurrence of the same disasters on Earth, we still cannot manage to prevent and control them. But I have to admit that they provide us some benefits.
Typhoons are the one of these.
>> Typhoons are just one of these acts of god that give back to nature.
After passing typhoons, the temperature of the surface drops and amount of freshwater is provided to us. It works like a circulating system.
>> After the typhoons have passed, the surface temperature would drop and the amount of freshwater would increase. Typhoons bring a large amount of rainwater which improves the freshwater supply especially in areas suffering from drought. It works like a regulating system.
There is another one. Insects and bugs acting as carrier of disease which is fatal to many trees are vanished by forest fires.
>> Here\'s another example. Forest fires kill off insects and bugs that act as carriers of diseases which are fatal to trees.
In addition, by removing weaker trees or dead wood by fires, remained plants can be nutritious and provided a more spacious place.
>> In addition, the trees and plants that survived the fire would be stronger or more nutritious, and the forest would be more spacious since the weaker trees or dead woods are completely destroyed or removed by the fire.
It\'s obvious natural disasters destroy many things relating to us and wild lives, but it\'s also an essential factor in some points.
>> It\'s obvious that natural disasters destroy many things related to humans and wildlife, but we can\'t deny the fact that they are also beneficial to all living things.
Natural disasters such as typhoons and forest fires have a power of circulation of our ecosystem to make Earth stronger so that is why it\'s a good thing for us.
>> Natural disasters, such as typhoons and forest fires play an important role in regulating our ecosystem and maintaining a balance in nature.
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