Can old ages contribute to society?
학생이 쓴 원문
First of all, I can’t easily tell you ‘Yes’ regarding this question.
Traditionally, experiences and knowledge of the elderly contributed greatly to society with respect.
Unfortunately, the old ages have been losing their places because society has been changed too quickly.
Everyone knows that it is hard to keep up with the trends.
However, we still need wisdom of our parents’ generation.
I believe that wisdom still remains precious value beyond knowledge and technologies.
강사 첨삭
Hello there, YJ!
Thank you for taking your time doing your homework.
Please review the correct grammar usage of \'been\'.
Below is an example.
We say, have been studying. We do not say, have been studied.
If you have more questions on this, ask me freely in class.
Here are my corrections.
First of all, I can’t easily tell you ‘Yes’ regarding this question.
>> Correct
Traditionally, experiences and knowledge of the elderly contributed greatly to society with respect.
>> Traditionally, experiences and knowledge of the elderly contributed greatly to the society with respect.
Unfortunately, the old ages have been losing their places because society has been changed too quickly.
>> Unfortunately, the old aged people have been losing their places because the society has changed quickly.
Everyone knows that it is hard to keep up with the trends.
>> Correct
However, we still need wisdom of our parents’ generation.
>> However, we still need the wisdom of our parents’ generation.
I believe that wisdom still remains precious value beyond knowledge and technologies.
>> I believe that wisdom still remains precious beyond knowledge and technologies.
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