Can the government do anything to improve people’s health?
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It is proved that the life expectancy can be increased, if the government provide various services by proper measures. I think that the most improtant thing is the national health insurance. People are asked to pay insurance fee according to their income, it is not high amount so most people are willing to pay it. People have a right to get medical service with discounted price that might be 10% of total medical expenses. I believe that all Koreans don\'t worry about their medical fee because of the national insurance. Regular medical check-up is also effective way to improve people\'s health. We can see the total cancer patients are increaseing every year but it doen\'t mean that the government\'s mesure is failed because people find their disease earler. It give an opportunities to treat patients in an early stage, so it show the positive results regarding the survival rate. I think nutrition is one of the things people have to care so government educate people what they eat to maintain
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~ T. CamilleIt is proved that the life expectancy can be increased, if the government provide various services by proper measures.
>> CORRECT!
I think that the most improtant thing is the national health insurance.
>> I think that the most important thing is the national health insurance.
OR >> I think that the most important thing is securing a national health insurance.
People are asked to pay insurance fee according to their income, it is not high amount so most people are willing to pay it.
>> People are asked to pay insurance fee according to their income, it is not a high amount so most people are willing to pay it.
OR >> People are asked to pay insurance fee according to their income, the amount isn\'t that high so most people are willing to pay it.
People have a right to get medical service with discounted price that might be 10% of total medical expenses.
People have a right to get medical service with discounted price that might be 10% of total medical expenses.
>> CORRECT!
I believe that all Koreans don\'t worry about their medical fee because of the national insurance.
>> CORRECT!
Regular medical check-up is also effective way to improve people\'s health.
>> Regular medical check-up is also an effective way to improve people\'s health.
We can see the total cancer patients are increaseing every year but it doen\'t mean that the government\'s mesure is failed because people find their disease earler.
>> We can see the total cancer patients are increaseing every year but it doesn\'t mean that the government measures are failed because people find their disease earlier.
It give an opportunities to treat patients in an early stage, so it show the positive results regarding the survival rate.
It give an opportunities to treat patients in an early stage, so it show the positive results regarding the survival rate.
>> It gives opportunities to treat patients in an early stage, so it shows the positive results regarding the survival rate.
I think nutrition is one of the things people have to care so government educate people what they eat to maintain
I think nutrition is one of the things people have to care so government educate people what they eat to maintain
>> I think nutrition is one of the things people have to care so government educate people what they eat to maintain a healthy lifestyle.
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