Can we say the Internet makes the news world better?

2021-05-11 · 첨삭 강사 Jasmin

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First, because of Internet, people in not only Korea, but every country don\'t have to buy newspaper anymore to read news . In other words, the Internet has changed the way people get a new issue. They can know many information and what kind of events occur in real time through the Internet. Second, writing the news as well as reading it becomes easier, contents of many news have become lighter even unreliable. This is because the more people who can use the Internet there are, a lot of news makers make news more stimulating. They even deceive readers adding fake things to their news because they want to let more people read their news. Lastly, thanks to Internet, almost everyone can get the news very easily. However, using this advantage of the Internet, sometimes the government or politicians use the Internet news as a means of driving public opinion. And they also have some news makers report the news of celebrities to hide the news including their fault and make it less noticeable.

강사 첨삭


Hi [이름], thank you for this. Have a great day!
Jasmin


First, because of Internet, people in not only Korea, but every country don\'t have to buy newspaper anymore to read news .
>>Nowadays, because of the internet, people all over the world don\'t need newspapers to be updated about the current issues. 
In other words, the Internet has changed the way people get a new issue.
>>In other words, the internet has been use as a significant source of information. 
 They can know many information and what kind of events occur in real time through the Internet.
>>You can have the latest news updates in an instant. 
Second, writing the news as well as reading it becomes easier, contents of many news have become lighter even unreliable.
>>Secondly, publishing news and reading news has become easier. However, some of the news are unreliable. 
This is because the more people who can use the Internet there are, a lot of news makers make news more stimulating.
>>People can easily make fake news in the internet without any basis. A lot of people spread the news immediately using the internet. 
 They even deceive readers adding fake things to their news because they want to let more people read their news.
>>Sometimes they  deceive readers by their headlines so people would be intrigue to read it. 
Lastly, thanks to Internet, almost everyone can get the news very easily. However, using this advantage of the Internet.
>>Lastly, thanks to the internet, almost everyone can instantly receive news and information in their most convenient way.
 sometimes the government or politicians use the Internet news as a means of driving public opinion.
>>The government and politicians use the internet to ask the opinion of the public. 
 And they also have some news makers report the news of celebrities to hide the news including their fault and make it less noticeable.
>>There are also paparazzi that alters the report about celebrities. 

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