Can you bear not having your cell phone for a week?

2022-06-27 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

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Can you bear not having your cell phone for a week? I could bear without my cell phone. But, it will be uncomfortable. I always use my phone. Actually, I\'am trying to not use the youtube and instagram. That appes make me spend a lot of time. I think using the phone for positive thing like searching the road and information is not a problem. If I spend a lot of time to watch youtube and instagram, it\'s a problem. -When I celebrate my friend, the friend invite the friend\'s friends including me. So, there are some celebrant who I didn\'t know. But, I usually hang out wiht them. That guys usually was good guys. -I\'m not weak in alchohol. But, I don\'t really enjoy the alchohol. I like the mix of beer and Soju. Beer is cool and chill. So, if I mix the beer and the Joju, I could enjoythe chill and Soju. -I only apply the a close cafe to me. -I think that working form home is good environment to care kids. I consider my furture. My experiences is strength to apply the job.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!

Thank you for sharing and have a good day! See you later!

~T. Roanne ^_^
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I could bear without my cell phone. 
>> Correct! 
But, it will be uncomfortable. 
>> Correct! 
I always use my phone. 
>> Correct! 
Actually, I\'am trying to not use the youtube and instagram. 
>> Actually, I am trying to not use the YouTube and Instagram. 
That appes make me spend a lot of time. 
>> Those apps/applications make me spend a lot of time. 
I think using the phone for positive thing like searching the road and information is not a problem. 
>>I think using the phone for positive things like searching the location and information is not a problem. 
If I spend a lot of time to watch youtube and instagram, it\'s a problem.
>> If I spend a lot of time to watch YouTube and Instagram, it\'s a problem.

-When I celebrate my friend, the friend invite the friend\'s friends including me. 
So, there are some celebrant who I didn\'t know. But, I usually hang out wiht them. That guys usually was good guys.
>> When I celebrate my friend, that friend invites her other friends and including me. So, there are some guests who I didn\'t know. But, I usually hang out with them. Those guys usually were good guys.
-I\'m not weak in alchohol. But, I don\'t really enjoy the alchohol. I like the mix of beer and Soju. Beer is cool and chill. So, if I mix the beer and the Joju, I could enjoythe chill and Soju.
>> I\'m not weak in alcohol. But, I don\'t really enjoy the alcohol. I like the mix of beer and Soju. Beer is cool and chill. So, if I mix the beer and the Soju, I could enjoy the chill and Soju.
-I only apply the a close cafe to me.
>> I only apply to a closer cafe to me. OR I only apply to a  nearby cafe to me.
-I think that working form home is good environment to care kids. I consider my furture. My experiences is strength to apply the job.
>>I think that working from home is a good environment to take care of kids. I consider my future. My experiences is strength to apply the job. 

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