Can you remember an advertising campaign that caught your attention? Please share something about it
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There is a public service advertisement that is being aired these days on TV. A young girl appears with long face and says that “my daddy loves me…. only when I behave the way as he wants to. My mom likes me… only when in front of other people.” And the narration follows that “more than 80 percent of child abuse occurs in the family and by his/her own parents.” When I first saw the advertisement on TV, I was shocked. The ad’s implies that children are maltreated physically, sexually or emotionally mostly by their parents. Before I saw the campaign, I thought that child abuse occurred by others, not by his/her own father or mother. The ad makes me reflect on how I have treated my daughter. It was true that I sometimes got angry with her just because I was not in a good mood. Another advertisement is the new vehicle that we just launched. For the first time since 1997, we have begun airing the TV commercial to build our brand and promote our products.
강사 첨삭
Good day Sir [이름]!
I was shocked with the advertisement you mentioned below.
Child abuse is really a problem these days in many countries.
The parents should be taking good care of their child.
I\'m sorry that there are parents who abuse them.
The government and significant others should do something about this. Do you agree with me?
Talk to you soon! Happy happy Friday!
Teacher Nina
There is a public service advertisement that is being aired these days on TV.
>> Correct
A young girl appears with long face and says that “my daddy loves me…. only when I behave the way as he wants to.
>> A young girl appeared with a long face and said, \" My daddy loves me only when I behave the way he wants to.
>> OR: A young girl appeared with a long face and said that his father loves him only when she behaves the way he wants to.
My mom likes me… only when in front of other people.”
>> Correct
And the narration follows that “more than 80 percent of child abuse occurs in the family and by his/her own parents.”
>> Correct
When I first saw the advertisement on TV, I was shocked.
>> Correct
The ad’s implies that children are maltreated physically, sexually or emotionally mostly by their parents.
>> Correct
>> OR: The ad implies that chidlren are abused physically, sexually, emotionally and mentally by their parents.
Before I saw the campaign, I thought that child abuse occurred by others, not by his/her own father or mother.
>> Before I saw the campaign, I thought that child abuse is done by others, not by his/her father or mother.
The ad makes me reflect on how I have treated my daughter.
>> Correct
It was true that I sometimes got angry with her just because I was not in a good mood.
>> Correct
Another advertisement is the new vehicle that we just launched.
>> Correct
For the first time since 1997, we have begun airing the TV commercial to build our brand and promote our products.
>> Correct
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