Can you talk about a person who has influenced your life?

2022-09-13 · 첨삭 강사 Christina

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I am influenced by IU, who is a famous singer in Korea and a good influencer to me because she is a good model for helping people in need. Her life encouraged me to sing a song and she gave me the dream to be a good influencer like her. I want to be a singer like IU and a good influencer to help people in need.

강사 첨삭

Hello Rana!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I am influenced by IU, who is a famous singer in Korea 

>> I am influenced by IU, who is a famous singer in Korea.


and a good influencer to me because she is a good model for helping people in need. 

>> She is a good influencer for me because she is a good model in helping people in need. 

Her life encouraged me to sing a song and she gave me the dream to be a good influencer like her. 

>> CORRECT!


I want to be a singer like IU and a good influencer to help people in need.

>> I want to be a singer like IU and a good influencer as well and help people in need.

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