Can you tell a brief history of your hometown?
학생이 쓴 원문
My hometown which is Damyang is famous for beautiful scenes of bamboo trees, peaceful farms, and malleable people. Thus many literary men were born in Damyang. Most poets used to discuss about political issues and share their opinion about their works.
There was a kind of school called SoSHeWon where was built in 1530 year in Joseon Dynasty. The walls are decorated with gorgeous hand writings by the greatest literary men who lived in that time. One of them, [이름]Cheul who was an ancestor of my family cultivated many clever juniors at Soshewon from 1551 to 1561. It is still exist for visitors who want to feel the ancestor\'s emotions.
강사 첨삭
Happy Sunday to you Young Won!
It seems that you had an extensive research about your hometown to find out these details to place here on your composition. In many countries, one\'s roots is very important as it is where you trace your origin, culture, and tradition.
Now, you can tell these to your children for them to pass to their children too someday.
These details are more than enough for an IELTS answer. Thank you for always doing your best Yong Won.
See you tomorrow in class. Have a great night!
-T. Donna =)
>> Correct!
There was a kind of school called SoSHeWon where was built in 1530 year in Joseon Dynasty.
Thus many literary men were born in Damyang.
>> Correct!
Most poets used to discuss about political issues and share their opinion about their works.
>> Correct!
There was a kind of school called SoSHeWon where was built in 1530 year in Joseon Dynasty.
>> There is a kind of school called SoSHeWon that was built in the year 1530 in Joseon Dynasty.
The walls are decorated with gorgeous hand writings by the greatest literary men who lived in that time.
>> Correct!
One of them, [이름]Cheul who was an ancestor of my family cultivated many clever juniors at Soshewon from 1551 to 1561.
>> Correct!
It is still exist for visitors who want to feel the ancestor\'s emotions.
>> Correct!
Or: exists
Or: exists
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