Can you tell about a dream you\'ve had?
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Hahaha, I had many dreams when I was younger like president, police, firefighter, CET, and etc. What I wanted to be the most was a Guitarist above all I used to play a bass guitar until middle school. While I was playing it, I was fascinated by a bass guitar charm. But, my parents were against it and said \"You will do it just as a hobby.\" So, I had no choice but to give up.
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Hahaha, I had many dreams when I was younger like president, police, firefighter, CET, and etc.
>> I had lots of dreams when I was young like to become the president, police, firefighter, CET, etc.
What I wanted to be the most was a Guitarist above all I used to play a bass guitar until middle school.
>> What I wanted to be the most was a guitarist above all because I used to play a bass guitar until I was in middle school.
While I was playing it, I was fascinated by a bass guitar charm.
>> While I was playing it, I was fascinated by its charm.
But, my parents were against it and said \"You will do it just as a hobby.\"
>> But my parents were against it and told me it was just my hobby.
So, I had no choice but to give up.
>> Correct
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