Can you tell me how travelling the world affects life and personality?
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Travelling is great opportunities that we be able to get new experience and idea. I stayed in Dublin for 7 months and traveled all over Europe about 3 months last year. While I traveled in Europe, I felt sorry for those who don\'t have opportunities to see such new and beautiful things. Because I saw and experienced things that I couldn\'t imagine before. For example, when I saw aurora in Iceland, I felt emotions I hadn\'t felt since I was born. I was so enchanted that I almost cried. I won\'t be able to forget that time.
And I met various people and learned many things from them. By doing so, I could extend my perspective understanding of various people. [Teacher, I have a question. I knew that \'and\' doesn\'t suit in front of the sentence.
Which conjunctions should I use in this sentence?]
Especially, Meeting passionable friends encouraged me to have courage. Therefore, I think that travelling has a positive effect on life and personality.
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HAPPY TUESDAY!
Thank you so much, Bo [이름] for doing your homework today.
As for your questions, It’s fine to use a coordinating conjunction to launch an independent clause (a group of words with a subject and a verb that could stand alone as a sentence).
Great job overall!
~Teacher Eve.
Travelling is great opportunities that we be able to get new experience and idea.
>> Traveling is a great opportunity for us to get new experiences and ideas. I stayed in Dublin for 7 months and traveled all over Europe about 3 months last year.
>> I stayed in Dublin for 7 months and traveled all over Europe for about 3 months last year.
While I traveled in Europe, I felt sorry for those who don\'t have opportunities to see such new and beautiful things.
>>While I traveled in Europe, I felt sorry for those who don\'t have the opportunities to see such new and beautiful things.
Because I saw and experienced things that I couldn\'t imagine before.
>> Correct!
For example, when I saw aurora in Iceland, I felt emotions I hadn\'t felt since I was born.
>> For example, when I saw the aurora in Iceland, I felt emotions I hadn\'t felt ever since I was born.
I was so enchanted that I almost cried.
>> Correct!
I won\'t be able to forget that time.
>> Correct!
And I met various people and learned many things from them.
>> Correct!
By doing so, I could extend my perspective understanding of various people.
>> Correct!
[Teacher, I have a question. I knew that \'and\' doesn\'t suit in front of the sentence.
>> Teacher, I have a question. I know that \'and\' doesn\'t suit in front of a sentence.
Which conjunctions should I use in this sentence?]
>> Which conjunction should I use in this sentence?
Especially, Meeting passionable friends encouraged me to have courage.
>> Meeting passionate friends encouraged me to have more courage.
Therefore, I think that travelling has a positive effect on life and personality.
>> Correct!
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