Can you tell me something about the last time you felt so excited?
학생이 쓴 원문
I can\'t forget my exciting last summer vacation. I planed HACKATHON in my university with my friends. It was first Hackathon in my university. That motivated us. The event was completed successfully. And participant were satisfied of the experience. I was learned by the experience. Together makes us stronger. And working with good coworker is blessed.
강사 첨삭
Good evening, [이름]!
Happy Tuesday! ^^,)
Thank you so much for this composition.
I have read it well and I liked the way you expressed your ideas.
I just made some modifications for you to review later on.
See you in our next class.^^
__Teacher Mayleen :)
I can\'t forget my exciting last summer vacation.
>>> I can\'t forget my exciting vacation last summer.
I planed HACKATHON in my university with my friends.
>>> I planned a hackathon in my university with my friends.
It was first Hackathon in my university.
>>> It was the first hackathon in my university.
That motivated us.
>>> Correct!
The event was completed successfully.
>>> The event was successfully completed.
And participant were satisfied of the experience.
>>> Also, the participants were satisfied of the experience.
I was learned by the experience.
>>> I also learned from that experience.
Together makes us stronger.
>>> We\'re stronger together.
And working with good coworker is blessed.
>>> Thus, it\'s a blessing to have a coworker.
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