Can you think of a time when you wanted to do something but were too nervous to try? What did you do
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If I go to an amusement park, the ride I must ride is a roller coaster. So, I like to ride a scary and high roller coaster.
But I was about to go on a roller coaster ride that is said to be the scariest ride at the amusement park I went to. I saw the roller coaster running in front of me, and all of a sudden, I got too nervous. Umm, for some reason, I didn\'t want to ride that roller coaster. So, I was thinking about whether to ride it or not, and I said for the first time that I wouldn\'t ride it because I was so nervous. And then I tried to ride it, I took a deep breath and thought about it again, but in the end, I couldn\'t ride it.
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If I go to an amusement park, the ride I must ride is a roller coaster.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Whenever I go to an amusement park, I have to ride a roller coaster.
So, I like to ride a scary and high roller coaster.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I like riding fast, tall, and scary roller coasters.
But I was about to go on a roller coaster ride that is said to be the scariest ride at the amusement park I went to.
>> CORRECT.
I saw the roller coaster running in front of me, and all of a sudden, I got too nervous.
>> CORRECT.
Umm, for some reason, I didn\'t want to ride that roller coaster.
>> CORRECT.
So, I was thinking about whether to ride it or not, and I said for the first time that I wouldn\'t ride it because I was so nervous.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I kept thinking about whether I should ride it, and for the first time, I decided not to because I was so nervous.
And then I tried to ride it, I took a deep breath and thought about it again, but in the end, I couldn\'t ride it.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I took a deep breath and tried to convince myself to ride it, but in the end, I couldn\'t do it.
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