Can you think of any good hotel in your city? What are three good things about that hotel?
학생이 쓴 원문
I am living in Busan, and Paradise Hotel is the most famous hotel in Busan.
There are a lot of good things about this hotel.
First of all, it has a variety of programs.
For example, there are the Ha[이름]dae guide program, kids theme park, and leisure entertainment organizer activities.
Ha[이름]dae is one of the most beautiful beach in Busan.
Second, we can enjoy a great meal.
We can eat by seeing the beautiful view of the beach.
Next, we can stay in a comfortable room.
There are ocean terrace.
We can relax in Paradise hotel!
강사 첨삭
Hi there!
I am living in Busan, and Paradise Hotel is the most famous hotel in Busan.Here are the corrections.
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There are a lot of good things about this hotel.
There are a lot of good things about this hotel.
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First of all, it has a variety of programs.
First of all, it has a variety of programs.
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For example, there are the Ha[이름]dae guide program, kids theme park, and leisure entertainment organizer activities.
For example, there are the Ha[이름]dae guide program, kids theme park, and leisure entertainment organizer activities.
>>For example, there are programs, kids theme park, and other activities.
Ha[이름]dae is one of the most beautiful beach in Busan.
Ha[이름]dae is one of the most beautiful beach in Busan.
>>Ha[이름]dae is one of the most beautiful beaches in Busan
Second, we can enjoy a great meal.
Second, we can enjoy a great meal.
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We can eat by seeing the beautiful view of the beach.
We can eat by seeing the beautiful view of the beach.
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Next, we can stay in a comfortable room.
Next, we can stay in a comfortable room.
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There are ocean terrace.
There are ocean terrace.
>> There are terraces.
We can relax in Paradise hotel!
We can relax in Paradise hotel!
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