Can you think of two things you were happy about from this year, 2021?

2021-12-29 · 첨삭 강사 Christina

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First thing that it was happy is the day when the BTS concert announcement is out!! Because I want to go to BTS concert. The second thing is that I can learn acting. Because my dream is actress.

강사 첨삭

Hello Chloe!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


First thing that it was happy is the day when the BTS concert announcement is out!! 

>> First thing I was happy about was the day when the BTS concert announcement came out!!

Because I want to go to BTS concert. 

>> This is because I want to go to the BTS concert.

The second thing is that I can learn acting. Because my dream is actress.

>> The second thing is that I can learn acting because my dream is to be an actress.

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