'Canada'- Last Season

After 6 or 7 months, I stoped studying and prepared to go back to Korea because I didn't have enough money for staying. I went go Niagara Falls with Some of my firends who are from Korea. We took a express bus for 8 hours because Canada has broad landmasses. Ah! It was strange that the express bus has a toilet. Usually express bus go very long distance so it provide convenience for passangers. But there was bad smell sometimes. After we arrived at Niagara Falls we could take a boat for seeing there closely. The boat went by under Falls and it was very magnificent sight. I never forget it. Later If I have enough time, I will go there again with my family and want to show the beauties of nature. I hope that the day would come as soone as possible.

Hi [이름]^^ That is such an interesting story. Seeing the Niagara Falls must be a very memorable experience. The scenery must have been so captivating. I also hope that I can go there someday. ~teacher Dona   MY CORRECTIONS^^: After 6 or 7 months, I stoped studying and prepared to go back to Korea because I didn't have enough money for staying.>>After 6 or 7 months in Canada, I stopped studying and prepared to go back to Korea because I didn뭪 have enough money to stay there. I went go Niagara Falls with Some of my firends who are from Korea. >>I went to Niagara Fall with some of my friends from Korea.We took a express bus for 8 hours because Canada has broad landmasses. >>We took an express bus for 8 hours because Canada has broad landmasses.Ah! It was strange that the express bus has a toilet. >>CORRECT J Usually express bus go very long distance so it provide convenience for passangers. >>Usually, the express bus travels a very long distance so the toilet is there to provide convenience for passengers. But there was bad smell sometimes. >>But sometimes it gives off a bad smell.After we arrived at Niagara Falls we could take a boat for seeing there closely. >>After we arrived at Niagara fall, we rode a boat to get a closer look at it.The boat went by under Falls and it was very magnificent sight. >>The boat went under the falls and it was such a magnificent sight.I never forget it. >>I will never forget it. Later If I have enough time, I will go there again with my family and want to show the beauties of nature. >>Someday, if I have enough time, I will go there again with my family to show them the beauties of nature.I hope that the day would come as soone as possible. >>I hope that day would come as soon as possible.