Cancer

2012-08-06 · 첨삭 강사 Michelle

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I visted any cancer's patient He Known it one year ago He felt fatique and cough so he went to see a Dr at vest hospital in Korea The Dr cheked some kind of exame The Dr diagnosised Cancerof Lung He stared exercise and stoped smiking It will be changed his life to protect going on his cancer He got radiation for a while But his cancer metasasised the other organ Now he feel so painful Finally the Dr recomended operation He will operation tomorrow Evendough he didn't say any more maybe he so much disappointed We know whenever everybody will be dided But we want to live long time with Family I feel so sad I don't know how to comfort for him and his Family

강사 첨삭

Hi Miss [이름], What a kind heart you have! I feel your sadness. If only we could do anything to be of help. I am sure your presence is more than enough for him and his family. You are great blessing to many. (^^) May you have a great day ahead. You deserve the very best! ^^ T. Michelle I visted any cancer\'s patient >>> I visited a random cancer\'s patient.He Known it one year ago >>> He had known it a year ago.He felt fatique and cough so he went to see a Dr at vest hospital in Korea>>> He felt fatigue and had cough so he went to see a doctor at the nearest hospital in Korea.The Dr cheked some kind of exame >>> The doctor checked him up with some kind of examinations.The Dr diagnosised Cancerof Lung >>> The doctor diagnosed cancer of the lung.He stared exercise and stoped smiking >>>He started exercising and stopped smoking.It will be changed his life to protect going on his cancer >>> It will be a changed of lifestyle to protect him further going on cancer. He got radiation for a while >>> Correct, but don\'t forget to observe proper punctuation at the end of a sentence. >>> He got radiation for awhile.But his cancer metasasised the other organ >>> But his cancer metastasized to other organ. Now he feel so painful >>> Now he feels so much in pain. Finally the Dr recomended operation >>> Finally the doctor recommended an operation. He will operation tomorrow >>> He will be operated tomorrow.Evendough he didn\'t say any more >>>Eventhough he didn\'t say anything anymore.maybe he so much disappointed >>> Maybe he is so much disappointed.We know whenever everybody will be dided >>> We know eventually everyone will die. But we want to live long time with Family >>> But we want to live a long time with our family.I feel so sad I don\'t know how to comfort for him and his Family >>> I feel so sad and I don\'t know how to comfort him and his family.

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