Candy

My name is [Name]. I like candys so much that i think i will die whitout candys. So my mom is trying to make me a good healfy child. At first, she try to tell me that candys are not good for you. But i already know that. So then mom put a candy in a water full buket. And we keep looking in the water buket. At first, moting happend! But sudiny there was some white stuff. So aftter that day i didn't ate a candy.

Hello Ji[이름]! Your mother is right. Candies are bad for you. They have nothing but sugar, which is the worst thing ever made. I used to like candies too, but I found out about the bad effects of sugar to my body. Thank you for sharing about this amusing story. Please review my corrections below. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ My name is [Name]. >> CORRECT! I like candys so much that i think i will die whitout candys. >> I like candies so much that I think I will die without candies. So my mom is trying to make me a good healfy child. >> So my mom is trying to turn me into a good and healthy child. At first, she try to tell me that candys are not good for you. >> At first, she tried to tell me that candies are not good for me. But i already know that. >> But I already knew that. So then mom put a candy in a water full buket. >> My mom then put a candy in a bucket full of water. And we keep looking in the water buket. >> Then we just looked at the water in the bucket. At first, moting happend! >> At first, nothing happened. But sudiny there was some white stuff. >> Suddenly, there was some white stuff in the water. So aftter that day i didn\'t ate a candy. >> After that day, I didn\'t eat candies anymore.