Capitalism
학생이 쓴 원문
We are losing our values, morals, conscience and judgement in the face of captalism.
Capitalism doesn\'t have goodness, right and humanity. Its\' purpose is to gain more and more money faster.
Capitalism sell even underage alcohol, drugs, cigarette .
Whenever I see violent online games, I feel angry and I\'d like to ask them.
Do you want to your children to play these games too?
강사 첨삭
Hello Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for your response. I think one of the causes of juvenile violation is allowing them to indulge on these \"adult\" activities like smoking and drinking alcohol. Well that makes me agree with you that its all abut capitalism.
Enjoy the day
Aki~
We are losing our values, morals, conscience and judgement in the face of captalism.
>>> We are losing our values, morals, conscience, and judgment in the face of capitalism.
>>> We are losing our values, morals, conscience, and judgment due to capitalism.
Capitalism doesn\'t have goodness, right and humanity. Its\' purpose is to gain more and more money faster.
>>> Capitalism doesn\'t have goodness, right, and humanity. Its purpose is to gain a lot of money in a fast way.
Capitalism sell even underage alcohol, drugs, cigarette .
>>> Capitalism sells alcohol, drugs, and cigarette even to underage people.
Whenever I see violent online games, I feel angry and I\'d like to ask them.
>>> CORRECT
Do you want your children to play these games too?
>>> CORRECT
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