Car shouldn't be banned from city center.

2018-10-17 · 첨삭 강사 Rosie

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I think that car shouldn't be banned from city center because Korea is a free nation. Unless the country were in politic chaos, country ensure people's rights and freedom. The government can't ban car usage compulsorily because the car is also a kind of private property. So, the government has no right to prevent people from using the car. Besides, people don't use the car on only convinient purpose. Disabled people and the elderly have no choice but to take the cars to go somewhere. I think that it is better to give incentive to people who use care more less than to ban car usage.

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I think that car shouldn\'t be banned from city center because Korea is a free nation.

>> CORRECT


Unless the country were in politic chaos, country ensure people\'s rights and freedom.

>> Unless the country is politically chaotic, the country should ensure people\'s rights and freedom.


The government can\'t ban car usage compulsorily because the car is also a kind of private property.

>> The government can\'t ban car usage compulsorily because cars are also a kind of private property.


So, the government has no right to prevent people from using the car.

>> So, the government has no right to prevent people from using their cars.


Besides, people don\'t use the car on only convinient purpose.

>> Besides, people don\'t use their cars during convenient purpose.


Disabled people and the elderly have no choice but to take the cars to go somewhere.

>> Disabled people and the elderly have no choice but to take their cars to go somewhere.


I think that it is better to give incentive to people who use care more less than to ban car usage.

>> I think that it is better to give incentive to people who use car more less than to ban car usage.

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