Career Education

Hi, Ji Yu!^^

I will give the comments on the second, continuation

of your essay!^^
Meanwhile, check this one first!

~~Teacher Erine~~

I really miss you too much!!!!

>> Correct. [But my dear, please use \"very much\" next time. Using \"too\" gives a negative meaning.\"]

Bot I only can uss my computer in the evening.

>> But I can only use my computer in the evening.

So I could not keep in touch with you.....

>> Correct

Now, I understood about all of my high school.

>> Now I understood everything about my high school.

If I have a time I will write a letter for you

>> If I have time, I will write a letter to you.
This essay about the carrer education.
>> This essay is about career education.
 I have two mentees as a mentor.

>> Correct
I taught them Math and English for 1 year and I realized about the importance of the career education.

>> I taught them Math and English for 1 year and I realized the importance of career education.
One mentee didn`t have the commitment of learning and always got bad grade.

>> One mentee didn\'t have the commitment to learn and always got bad grades.
Whenever she had a class with me, she talked with her friends and only watched her cell phone. 

>> Whenever she had a class with me, she talked with her friends and only looked at her cell phone.
 Also her attitude was wrong but I thought if she had a career, she would study much harder.

>> Also, her attitude is not so good but I thought that if she had a career, she will study much harder.
As a mentor, I let her know why she had to study.

>> As a mentor, I let her know why she has to study.
Only two things that she liked were Yodo and children.

>> There are only two things she like: Yodo and children.
I suggested her to be a Yudo teacher and she also agreed my opinion.

>> I suggested that she can be a Yodo teacher and she also agreed with my opinion.
At the end of the third year student, she promised me to study more.

>>At the end of my third year as a student, she promised me that she will study more.

And I kept in touch with her. 

>> Correct
 The other mentee has a goal which is to be a hotelier.

>> Correct