causes ofliving longer
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Man never stops seeking for more discoveries and inventions so it\'s no wonder that we are
able to live longer and more comfortable.
Anyway, please check the corrections I\'ve made for you.
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Of cause the first cause is developed science, especially medicine science.
>> Of course the first cause is developed science, especially medical science.
>> Of course the main reason is developed science, especially medical science.
Now many diseases that people couldn\'t imagine van be treated.
>> Now many diseases that people couldn\'t imagine can be treated.
In addition, life quality helps that.
>> In addition, the quality of life also helps.
>> In addition, the quality of life also contributes.
Life quality is getting better.
>> Our quality of life is getting better.
So we can wear clear clothes because of washing machine.
>> So we can wear clean clothes because of washing machines.
>> So we can wear clean clothes thanks to washing machines.
Also, we can eat nutritious foods.
>> CORRECT!!
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