Cell Phone
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I got my first cell phone when I was highschool 1st grade.
I was a second student who got a cell phone in my class.
No many student had a cell phone at that time.
But now, my nephew, a 1st grade in elementery student, has his own cell phone.
I think that 30,000 won is appropriate for a teenager's monthly cell phone bill.
I think that teenagers need cell phone for communicating with their parents. These days, teenagers are busy, and their parents too.
They are not together many time in house.
However, teenagers should not use cell phone too much for chatting with freinds.
강사 첨삭
Hey [이름]! so now your nephew has a cellphone huh? I rememeber I also got my first cellphone when I was a sophomore in highschool, but guess what? I lost it after 3 months, I lost in on valentines day, we were about to have lunch with my friends, and when I got out of the cab, I realized I left my cellphone in the cab.
I got my first cellphone when I was highschool 1st grade.
>>I got my first cellphone when I was a freshman in highschoolI was a second student who got a cell phone in my class.
No many student had a cell phone at that time.>> I was the second student who got a cellphone in my class, and not many students had a cellphone at that time.But now, my nephew, a 1st grader in elementery student, has his own cell phone.
>> But now, my student, a 1st grader in elementary, has his own cellphone.I think that 30,000 won is appropriate for a teenager's monthly cell phone bill.
>>I think that 30,0000 won is enough for a teenager's monthly cellphone bill.I think that teenagers need cell phone for communicating with their parents. These days, teenagers are busy, and their parents too.
>> I htink that teenagers need cellphones for communicationg with their parents. These days, teenagers are busy, and their parents as well.They are not together many time in house.
>> They usually don't spend much time at home together.
However, teenagers should not use cell phone too much for chatting with freinds.
>> However, teenagers should not use cellphones too much for chatiing with firends.
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