cellphone

2010-08-06 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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Let me tell you about using the cell phone. some of the advantage is that it's very comfortable. whenever i move into somewhere, i can keep in touch with someone easily. and also i use the cell phone to prtect myself. for example, walking the street away at night, i recongnized somone was following to me. and then i pretended to making a call my familly. it is possible to receive many informations as well. But, it think the disadvantage is the bill charges so much when i use the cell phone call. in my case, whenever i'm in library, i turn off the cell phone. because, i'm disturbed by turning on the cell phone. if i can control using the cell phone, it's very convenient for my life. hi verna. thank you very much for checking for my writting. see you later^^

강사 첨삭

Hello Tracy, Nice conversation this morning! Thanks for making your homework. I really apreciate your attitude in the class. Keep it up! I know that you would improve your English ability in no time. See you on Monday! Happy weekend! Love, Verna^^   Let me tell you about using the cell phone. >> Correct^^some of the advantage is that it's very comfortable. >>One of the advantage is that it's very convenient.whenever i move into somewhere, i can keep in touch with someone easily. >>Whenever I move somewhere, i can keep in touch with someone easily.and also i use the cell phone to prtect myself. >> And also I use the cell phone to protect myself.for example, walking the street away at night, i recongnized somone was following to me. and then i pretended to making a call my familly. >>For example,  I was walking on the street away at night, I noticed somone was following me. I pretended that I was making a call to my familly.it is possible to receive many informations as well. >>It is possible to receive many informations as well.But, it think the disadvantage is the bill charges so much when i use the cell phone call. >>But, I think the disadvantage is the bill charges so much when I make  cell phone calls.in my case, whenever i'm in library, i turn off the cell phone. >>In my case, whenever I'm in the library, I turn off my cell phone.because, i'm disturbed by turning on the cell phone. >>Because I'm disturbed when my phone is on.if i can control using the cell phone, it's very convenient for my life.>>If I can control using the cell phone, it's very convenient in my life.hi verna. thank you very much for checking for my writting. >>Hi Verna. Thank you very much for checking my composition.see you later^^ >>Correct^^

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