cellphone
학생이 쓴 원문
Let me tell you about using the cell phone.
some of the advantage is that it's very comfortable.
whenever i move into somewhere, i can keep in touch with someone easily.
and also i use the cell phone to prtect myself.
for example, walking the street away at night, i recongnized somone was following to me. and then i pretended to making a call my familly.
it is possible to receive many informations as well.
But, it think the disadvantage is the bill charges so much when i use the cell phone call.
in my case, whenever i'm in library, i turn off the cell phone.
because, i'm disturbed by turning on the cell phone.
if i can control using the cell phone, it's very convenient for my life.
hi verna. thank you very much for checking for my writting.
see you later^^
강사 첨삭
Hello Tracy,
Nice conversation this morning! Thanks for making your
homework. I really apreciate your attitude in the class.
Keep it up! I know that you would improve your English ability in no time.
See you on Monday! Happy weekend!
Love,
Verna^^
Let me tell you about using the cell phone.
>> Correct^^some of the advantage is that it's very comfortable.
>>One of the advantage is that it's very convenient.whenever i move into somewhere, i can keep in touch with someone easily.
>>Whenever I move somewhere, i can keep in touch with someone easily.and also i use the cell phone to prtect myself.
>> And also I use the cell phone to protect myself.for example, walking the street away at night, i recongnized somone was following to me. and then i pretended to making a call my familly.
>>For example, I was walking on the street away at night, I noticed somone was following me. I pretended that I was making a call to my familly.it is possible to receive many informations as well.
>>It is possible to receive many informations as well.But, it think the disadvantage is the bill charges so much when i use the cell phone call.
>>But, I think the disadvantage is the bill charges so much when I make cell phone calls.in my case, whenever i'm in library, i turn off the cell phone.
>>In my case, whenever I'm in the library, I turn off my cell phone.because, i'm disturbed by turning on the cell phone.
>>Because I'm disturbed when my phone is on.if i can control using the cell phone, it's very convenient for my life.>>If I can control using the cell phone, it's very convenient in my life.hi verna. thank you very much for checking for my writting.
>>Hi Verna. Thank you very much for checking my composition.see you later^^
>>Correct^^
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