'Cellular phone'

Nowdays most people have a cellular phone in Korea even though old people. It is great invention and makes me to lead comportable life. I can call anyone who I know anywhere and find some information on the internet by it. Also, I can play a game to use it and transfer money from into my account. I can do everything what I dream. But There are many side effects. When I go to my offece if I leave it in my home I will face on terrible situation. I cannot concentrate on my work and Someone who want to ask me something are confused by disconnection because most people depend on it. When I was young, I can memorize my friend's phone number but now I cannot memorize that. I just search address part of my phone. It make me comportable but my memory ability is getting worse.

Hi there Sir [이름]! I agree with your discussion about the importance of the cellphone today in our lives. I think that after t.v., it is one of the best discoveries in technology. However, I can say that I can survive a day without having one. Well, it also has negative effects but that already depends upon the user, I believe. Anyway, thanks for drafting this one, I enjoyed reading and suggesting grammar patterns for you to think and analyse. Be happy there at work. Have a wonderful weekend Sir [이름]! See you soon! --T. Donna--   Nowdays most people have a cellular phone in Korea even though old people. >>Correct!It is great invention and makes me to lead comportable life. >> It is a great invention and makes me to live a comportable life.I can call anyone who I know anywhere and find some information on the internet by it. >> Correct!Also, I can play a game to use it and transfer money from into my account. >> Also, I can play a game by using  it and transfer money to my account.I can do everything what I dream. >>Correct!But There are many side effects. >>Correct! (SMALL LETTER: there)When I go to my offece if I leave it in my home I will face on terrible situation. >> When I go to my office and  if I left it at home, I will face a terrible situation.I cannot concentrate on my work and Someone who want to ask me something are confused by disconnection >> I cannot concentrate on my work and someone who wants to ask me something is confused by the disconnection.because most people depend on it. >>Most people depend on it.When I was young, I can memorize my friend's phone number but now I cannot memorize that. >>Correct!I just search address part of my phone. >> I just search the address part of my phone.It make me comportable but my memory ability is getting worse. >> It makes me comportable but my memory ability is getting worse.