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2019-11-30 · 첨삭 강사 Oneil

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The Advertisement was like a beautiful drama and. However it would have no marketing effect on those who don’t know the fast food brand. Actually I felt no appetite after watching the drama but it would have some voice for those who are doing one -way love or know the brand very well for a long time considering it is a special version for the Valentine day.

강사 첨삭

Haha. I agree with you.

The Advertisement was like a beautiful drama and. 
>> The advertisement was like a beautiful drama.
  
However it would have no marketing effect on those who don’t know the fast food brand. 
>> Correct. 
  
Actually I felt no appetite after watching the drama but it would have some voice for those who are doing one -way love or know the brand very well for a long time considering it is a special version for the Valentine day.
>> Actually, I felt no appetite after watching the drama. Considering the fact that it is a special video for Valentines day, it would have some voice for those who are doing one - way love or for those  know the brand very well.
  

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