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2019-01-30 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

This society is global world and social network is neccessary to live. You must have heard that \"knowledge is power\", it shows how much important the information is. I think it is not the information that count, but how to use it. I think how to use it is about how to adapt myself to new world by using it. We have to know the trend of the world and follow that not to be dropped out from the flow. Thus, reading newspapers and discussing it is good way to find the changes and learn how to adapt to it.

강사 첨삭

Jay,

You made a good point but be careful of information overload.

~Lynn

This society is global world and social network is neccessary to live.

>> We are currently living in a global society so social networks are necessary in order for us to live.

You must have heard that \"knowledge is power\", it shows how much important the information is.

>> You must have heard that \"knowledge is power\", it shows how important information is.

I think it is not the information that count, but how to use it.

>> I think it is not the information that counts, but how we use it.

I think how to use it is about how to adapt myself to new world by using it.

>> I think how I use it will depend on how I adapt myself to a new world/environment.

We have to know the trend of the world and follow that not to be dropped out from the flow.

>> We have to know what is the trend in order to be able to go with the flow.

Thus, reading newspapers and discussing it is good way to find the changes and learn how to adapt to it.

>> Thus, reading newspapers and discussing it is a good way to find the changes and learn how to adapt to it. 

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