changing my hairdo~

2010-02-17 · 첨삭 강사 Jennifer

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First of all, I was very delight hear your cheerful voice.~ and also I am glad to hear that you took a enough rest during holiday.~ Last friday, I told you if i went home early, i was going to change my hairdo. even though I went home at 5pm, I dicided to change my hair. So i had a perm. when changing ended, i dissapointed about my hairdo. my friend told me. "it fits well for you. it's ok. don't be sad. Actually I cut my hair 3, Feburary. my hair being cut as short. when i change my hairdo first time. people asked me. "what happen?" did you remember? i mentioned about my hair. I cut my hair since i argued with my boyfreind. my boyfriend doesn't know it yet. because we didn't meet until now. After a month I am going to change my hairdo again as a straright short cut.

강사 첨삭

[이름], I am pleased that you liked my voice that morning. ;) Actually, I was so happy that I was able to talk with you after a long weekend. Since I stayed at home, I got bored. On the other hand, I am thankful for the extra day off because I was able to take a rest. I remember what you told me about your hairdo. And I remember that event when you had it cut short as well.  Ha! Ha! I am wondering how you look like before and now. Well, your friends say it fits you. I guess they can tell if it really fits. Thank you for this composition. I had a great time reading it. ^^ Have a nice day! XOXO, Jenny Here are the corrections: First of all, I was very delight hear your cheerful voice.~ and also I am glad to hear that you took a enough rest during holiday. >>First of all, I was so much delighted to hear your cheerful voice and glad that you took enough rest during the holidays.  Last friday, I told you if i went home early, i was going to change my hairdo. >>Last Friday, I told you, if I went home early I will have my hairdo changed. even though I went home at 5pm, I dicided to change my hair. >>Even if I went home at 5pm, though, I still decided to change my hair style. So I had a perm. >> Correct. when changing ended, i dissapointed about my hairdo. >>I got disappointed about how it turned out though. my friend told me. "it fits well for you. it's ok. don't be sad. >> My friend told me, “It fits you well do don’t be sad.”Actually I cut my hair 3, Feburary. my hair being cut as short. >> Actually, I cut my hair short last February 3.  when i change my hairdo first time. people asked me. "what happen?" >> When I changed my hair style the first time, people asked me, “What happened? “  did you remember? i mentioned about my hair. >> Do you remember? I mentioned it to you before.  I cut my hair since i argued with my boyfreind. my boyfriend doesn't know it yet. because we didn't meet until now. >> I had a haircut when I had an argument with my boyfriend. Until now, he doesn’t know it because we haven’t met yet. After a month I am going to change my hairdo again as a straright short cut. >> After a month, I plan to have my hair straightened or shorter again.

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