changing time with watching something
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when I was young, I enjoyed watching tv animation like pokemon. After grown up, my preference have been shifted to youtube or live streamings. Sometimes youtube streamer film contents using 90\'s stuffs to remind viewer\'s childhood. whenever I watched them, I feel surprised how changed it has compared with nowadays in the world. and I\'ve wondered how would be changed after 10 years.
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Hi John!
Thank you for your hard work every day.
This composition is definitely better.
The ideas were very specific and you expressed everything clearly.
Keep it up!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
when I was young, I enjoyed watching tv animation like pokemon. >> When I was young, I enjoyed watching TV animation shows like Pokemon.
After grown up, my preference have been shifted to youtube or live streamings.
>> When I grew up, my preference has shifted to YouTube or live streaming.
Sometimes youtube streamer film contents using 90\'s stuffs to remind viewer\'s childhood.
>> Sometimes YouTube videos feature stuff from the 90\'s to remind viewers of their childhood.
whenever I watched them, I feel surprised how changed it has compared with nowadays in the world.
>> Whenever I watch them, I feel surprised about how everything has changed in the world nowadays.
and I\'ve wondered how would be changed after 10 years.
>> I\'ve always wondered what else could change after ten years.
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