Chat on line

2010-08-12 · 첨삭 강사 janel

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In the Past, I would chat on line many times. It was interesting to meet someone on line. I met many people on the internet and I also had an offline meeting with some of them. But The friendship made in online didn't last long. I met them just one time. and then I chatted with other people. As time went by , I got tired of doing it. So nowdays, I don't chat on line. I can express my opinion online. and I also see other's thinking about some matter. I think that is enough. In conclusion, I like surfing the intenet. but I don't like chat on line.

강사 첨삭

I understand what you're talking about. You should just stick with chatting with the people you know. It's safer.-Teacher JM
In the Past, I would chat on line many times.
>>>In the past, I would chat online many times.
It was interesting to meet someone on line.
>>>Correct
I met many people on the internet and I also had an offline meeting with some of them.
>>>I met many people on the internet and I personally met up with some of them, too.
But The friendship made in online didn't last long.
>>>Sadly, the friendship made online didn't last that long.
I met them just one time.
and then I chatted with other people.
>>>I met them just one time and then I would chat with other people.
As time went by , I got tired of doing it.
>>>Correct
So nowdays, I don't chat on line.
>>>So nowadays, I don't chat on line anymore.
I can express my opinion online.
and I also see other's thinking about some matter.
>>>I just express my opinion online and I just surf by sites containing other people's ideas about some matters.
I think that is enough.
>>>Correct.
In conclusion, I like surfing the intenet. 
but I don't like chat on line.
>>>In conclusion, I like surfing the internet but I don't like chatting on line.

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