chatting with my friends
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Before I work here, I always used Nate-on messenger program when I use my computer. It was a kind of bridge between I and my friends. I didn't feel lonely even though I stayed alone in my room.
But I can't use the messenger program in my office. Because my company set up a strong fire wall on my laptop. So I can't install any software programs. It was felt to me like a tregedy at first, but I found an exit. I use the chatting room on my on-line community of my choir these days. I'm so lucky. It is a kind of vitamin to me exhausted.
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Hello [이름]!
Thank you for your composition today! What you shared is such a bad news on a Monday. We have the same case, because in our office, we are also not allowed to use any messenger.
T. Jane ^^
Before I work here, I always used Nate-on messenger program when I use my computer.
>> Before I worked here, I've always used Nate-on messenger when I use my computer.
It was a kind of bridge between I and my friends.
>> correct
I didn't feel lonely even though I stayed alone in my room.
>> correctBut I can't use the messenger program in my office.
>> correct
Because my company set up a strong fire wall on my laptop.
>> correct
So I can't install any software programs.
>> correct
It was felt to me like a tregedy at first, but I found an exit.
>> It was like a tragedy to me at first, but I found a way out.
I use the chatting room on my on-line community of my choir these days.
>> I use the chatting room in my online community of our choir these days.
I'm so lucky.
>> correct
It is a kind of vitamin to me exhausted.
>> It is a kind of relief for my exhausted mind.
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