child\'s labor

2025-02-03 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

학생이 쓴 원문

It is very unfortunate that young teenagers work illegally before 15. Maybe some teenagers might be forced to work for a living or family. But many teenagers want to earn money early without their parents knowing to buy somethings or enjoy entertainment. Rightly , this is a social evil. Employers are strictly punished and forced to stop business. Also we should educate teenagers about the problems of illegal labor.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ms. [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and to be honest, I am surprised that it also happens in your country. This kind of scenario is common in the Philippines and other countries striving to earn money. I remember as a child, I had some friends selling something to earn for their pocket money for school, but our government prohibited that.
Talk to you later.
Aki~

It is very unfortunate that young teenagers work illegally before 15.
>>>Unfortunately, young teenagers work illegally before 15.

Maybe some teenagers might be forced to work for a living or family.
>>>  CORRECT!

But many teenagers want to earn money early without their parents knowing to buy somethings or enjoy entertainment.
>>> But many teenagers want to earn money early without their parent\'s knowledge or consent to buy something or enjoy entertainment.
 
Rightly, this is a social evil.
>>>  CORRECT!

Employers are strictly punished and forced to stop business.
>>>  CORRECT!

Also we should educate teenagers about the problems of illegal labor.
>>>  CORRECT!

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