Children often eat food that is not good for their health. What do you think are the causes of this

2019-08-23 · 첨삭 강사 Joylin

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Nowadays, there are many kids that often have a meal which is not good for their fit. There are several reasons for this and particularly it caused by parents and educational institutions./Many parents who work both of them do not have a planty of time to take care their kids and make good and healthy meals for them. So the kids often eat fast-food although it is essential that children have well balanced diet for their good condition. So schools and authorities have to help the kids and the parents with solutions like providing healthy packed lunch or sending a volunteer cooker for them./A lack of education on nutrition is also one of the reasons for children’s poor diet. Because children don’t know which food is good or bad for their body without the education.We need to make children build their physical and manage their health on their own. Thus, educational institutions should make nutritional classes or increase a number of diet class. In conclusion,we can overcome the situation

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Nowadays, there are many kids that often have a meal which is not good for their fit. There are several reasons for this and particularly it caused by parents and educational institutions.
>>Nowadays, there are many kids who often eat meals which are not good for their fitness. There are several reasons for this and particularly, it is caused by parents and educational institutions.
Many parents who work both of them do not have a planty of time to take care their kids and make good and healthy meals for them. 
>>Many parents who both work do not have plenty of time to take care of their kids and make good and healthy meals for them. 
So the kids often eat fast-food although it is essential that children have well balanced diet for their good condition. So schools and authorities have to help the kids and the parents with solutions like providing healthy packed lunch or sending a volunteer cooker for them.
>>So kids often eat fast-food although it is essential that children have a well-balanced diet for their good condition. So, schools and authorities have to help the kids and the parents like providing a healthy packed lunch or sending a volunteer cook for them.
A lack of education on nutrition is also one of the reasons for children’s poor diet. Because children don’t know which food is good or bad for their body without the education.
>>The lack of education on nutrition is also one of the reasons of children’s poor diet. Because children don’t know which food is good or bad for their body without education.
We need to make children build their physical and manage their health on their own. Thus, educational institutions should make nutritional classes or increase a number of diet class. 
>>We need children to build their physical and manage their health on their own. Thus, educational institutions should make nutritional classes or increase the number of diet class. 

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