children to team sports
학생이 쓴 원문
Many parents want their children to improve relationship by participating some sports team.
I considerably agree with the statement.
literatery \'Sports\' needs 3 compounds - rules, competition, and objective.
Generally, two counterpart team compete one another toward same aim with abiding by rules.
One people who shows good performance only in the team can not win in the game.
Teammates should help each other for beat the opponents.
In this process, children would learn about relation skills like cooperation, communication, and teamwork.
These kind of sills also need in their future lives which Adults know already.
Therefore, parents usually want to enroll their children in the city sports team.
It is positive effect in the society.
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Many parents want their children to improve relationship by participating some sports team.
>> Many parents want their children to improve their relationships by participating in a sports team.
I considerably agree with the statement.
>> I strongly agree with this statement.
literatery \'Sports\' needs 3 compounds - rules, competition, and objective.
I considerably agree with the statement.
>> I strongly agree with this statement.
literatery \'Sports\' needs 3 compounds - rules, competition, and objective.
>> In sports, three key components are necessary: rules, competition, and objectives.
Generally, two counterpart team compete one another toward same aim with abiding by rules.
Generally, two counterpart team compete one another toward same aim with abiding by rules.
>> Generally, two opposing teams compete against each other toward the same goal while abiding by the rules.
One people who shows good performance only in the team can not win in the game.
One people who shows good performance only in the team can not win in the game.
>> One person who performs well individually cannot win the game alone.
Teammates should help each other for beat the opponents.
Teammates should help each other for beat the opponents.
>> Teammates should help each other to beat their opponents.
In this process, children would learn about relation skills like cooperation, communication, and teamwork.
In this process, children would learn about relation skills like cooperation, communication, and teamwork.
>> Through this process, children can develop relationship skills like cooperation, communication, and teamwork.
These kind of sills also need in their future lives which Adults know already.
These kind of sills also need in their future lives which Adults know already.
>> These kinds of skills are also necessary for their future lives, as adults already know.
Therefore, parents usually want to enroll their children in the city sports team.
Therefore, parents usually want to enroll their children in the city sports team.
>> Correct
It is positive effect in the society.
It is positive effect in the society.
>> This has a positive effect on society.
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