Children under 13 should not be allowed to babysit.
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강사 첨삭
Dear [이름],
A WONDERFUL Wednesday to you! ^.^
First of all, I would like to say I STRONGLY AGREE WITH YOU.
I also admire you for being open about this topic.
You are willing to give your trust to your son when it comes to his sister\'s safety.
I think babysitting is a good practice for elder kids in a family to understand their younger siblings.
That\'s all for now! ^^
Happy reading! ^^,
See you soon! ^^.
... Teacher Paula ... ^.~
There is no reason that children under 13 couldn\'t take care of someone younger.
>> There is no reason for children under 13 who can\'t take care of someone younger than them.
However it is unusual that parents let a child babysit younger children.
>> However, it is unusual for parents to let a child babysit younger children.
Children in Korea are really busy after school due to parents are working ogether.
>> Children in Korea are really busy after school due to their parents busy work.
>> OR: Children in Korea are really busy after school due to both of their parents are working.
They attend various institute until their parents get back to home.
>> They attend various institutes until their parents get back to their homes.
>> OR: They attend various institutes until their parents get back home.
It is really shame that children are not having a time with parents.
>> It is really a shame that children are not having time with their parents.
I am not sure if children over 13 years old can look after babies well.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: I\'m not sure if children over 13 years old can look after babies well.
I guess that the most parents in Korea do not trust their child to babysit.
>> I guess most parents in Korea do not trust their children to babysit.
If my son is able to babysit his younger sister well without any accident, I will let him take care of my daughter.
>> CORRECT!
>> OR: If my son is able to babysit his younger sister well without any accident, I will let him take care of her.
I know that first of all I must trust my son to do well and give him enough time without punishment and yelling.
>> I know that first of all, I must trust my son to do things well and give him enough time to do those without punishment and yelling.
Many kids now a days are much more mature than usual.
>> Many kids nowadays are much more mature than before.
>> OR: Many kids nowadays are much maturer than before.
>> OR: Many kids nowadays are much more mature.
>> OR: Many kids nowadays are much maturer.
If they want to babysit that they should take a class first and be sure that the adult is completely comfortable with the situation.
>> If they want to babysit, they should take a class first and be sure that the adults are completely comfortable with the situation.
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