chocolate
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I\'m so surprised that my homework subject is chocolate since I read your feedback as eating chocolate at my table.
So, as return to anwer about chocolate, chocolate is usually brown color with sweet taste. For that taste, many people like it, and I also like to eat chocolate. However it is too sweet to eat only chocolate, so I prefer to eat chocolate with biscuit. It seems like many consumer want to eat like me, so there are many chocolate buscuit in any store and mart. Chocolate\'s sweet taste is the biggest reason of people finding, but it has also several sideeffect. first, people who eat chocolate are more easier to get a teeth decay than those who don\'t.
second, If they eat lots of chocolate, their weight will be increased. Finally, related to second problem, they might be caught a diabetes mallitus. this desease is so terrible, that people should not eat chocolate too much.
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I\'m so surprised that my homework subject is chocolate since I read your feedback as eating chocolate at my table.
>> I\'m so surprised that my homework subject is about chocolate since I read your feedback while I was eating chocolate at my table.
>> I\'m so surprised that my homework subject is about chocolate since I read your feedback while I was eating chocolate at my table.
So, as return to anwer about chocolate, chocolate is usually brown color with sweet taste.
>> So, let\'s talk about my answer. Chocolate is usually brown and sweet.
For that taste, many people like it, and I also like to eat chocolate.
>> A lot of people like it by dint of the taste. I also like to eat chocolate.
However it is too sweet to eat only chocolate, so I prefer to eat chocolate with biscuit.
>> However, it is too sweet so I prefer eating chocolate with biscuits.
It seems like many consumer want to eat like me, so there are many chocolate buscuit in any store and mart.
>> It seems like many consumers want to eat it the same as I do that\'s why there are many chocolate biscuits in stores and marts now.
Chocolate\'s sweet taste is the biggest reason of people finding, but it has also several sideeffect.
>> The sweet taste of chocolate is the biggest reason why people look for it , but it has also several side effects.
first, people who eat chocolate are more easier to get a teeth decay than those who don\'t.
>> First, people who eat chocolate get cavities than those who don\'t.
second, If they eat lots of chocolate, their weight will be increased.
>> Second, if they eat lots of chocolate, they\'ll easily gain weight.
Finally, related to second problem, they might be caught a diabetes mallitus.
>> Finally, and this is related to the second problem, they may get diabetes mellitus.
this desease is so terrible, that people should not eat chocolate too much.
>> This disease is horrifying, so people shouldn\'t eat too much chocolate.
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