Choice of the fast food
학생이 쓴 원문
I\'m sure fast food is bad for everyone\'s health.
However, many young people and students like it very much.
Therefore I don\'t think it\'s right to ban all of the fast food they love a lot.
In that sense, I don\'t think fast food should be banned.
Of course, it needs to be properly controlled.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름] Ha!
Those are some good points you just made there.
The statements you chose were simple and clear.
This is the kind of work I expect from you.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I\'m sure fast food is bad for everyone\'s health.
>> Correct
However, many young people and students like it very much.
However, many young people and students like it very much.
>> Correct
Therefore I don\'t think it\'s right to ban all of the fast food they love a lot.
Therefore I don\'t think it\'s right to ban all of the fast food they love a lot.
>> Therefore, I don\'t think it\'s right to ban all kinds of fast food they love a lot.
In that sense, I don\'t think fast food should be banned.
In that sense, I don\'t think fast food should be banned.
>> Correct
Of course, it needs to be properly controlled.
Of course, it needs to be properly controlled.
>> Correct
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