Choo suk
학생이 쓴 원문
'Choo suk' is a Korea traditional vacation,and people eat delicious traditional foods and talk with their family. Especially, this vacation called gold vacation, because of long periods.Actually, I have to visit my family to live other place,but I couldn't do that, because of bad weather,and traffic conditon. So I stayed at home during 'choo suk'.I ate 'Song pyeon',that is korean food which make in 'Choo suk'.And there were many TV programs which are funny and new arrival, so I watched TV all days. Exactly, I had a boring vacation,however, I could get a good time to take a rest. I'll expect next 'Choo suk' again.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름] J
Two things, I am sorry to hear that you weren’t able to spend this holiday with your family but good to hear that you were able to get some rest. Happy weekendJ
'Choo suk' is a Korea traditional vacation,and people eat delicious traditional foods and talk with their family.
>>'Choo suk' is Korea’s traditional holiday. We eat delicious and traditional food and talk with our family.
Especially, this vacation called gold vacation, because of long periods.
>> Especially, this holiday, it is called “gold vacation”, because of longer periods.
Actually, I have to visit my family to live other place,but I couldn't do that, because of bad weather,and traffic conditon.
>> Actually, I want to visit my family who lives in another city, but I couldn't do that because of the bad weather, and of traffic jam.
So I stayed at home during 'choo suk'.
>>So, I decided to just stay home this Choo suk.
I ate 'Song pyeon',that is korean food which make in 'Choo suk'.
>> I ate 'Song pyeon', a Korean traditional food prepared during ‘Choo suk'.
And there were many TV programs which are funny and new arrival, so I watched TV all days.
>> I just watched the through out the holiday because there were a lot of TV programs which are funny and new episodes.
Exactly, I had a boring vacation,however, I could get a good time to take a rest.
>> Indeed, I had a boring vacation; however, I was able to get some rest.
I'll expect next 'Choo suk' again.
>>I’m looking forward to the next Choo suk again.
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