Choose between these holidays and explain your choice:
학생이 쓴 원문
Choose between these holidays and explain your choice:
a. a tour of historic sites in Europe
b. a relaxing stay at a beach resort in Southeast Asia
c. going on safari in Africa
I\'d like to choose a tour of historic sites in Europe. Because I\'ve been to some coutries in Europe on business trip a dacade ago. Back then, I had an awesome and friutful time. What I was surprised most was so many cultural heritage in Europe and so many tourists from acoss the world to see them.
I learned why the tourism industry is called a chimney-free industry through my trip to Europe. Seeing countless people flocking to see one painting there with a lot of money and time, I came to look back on how much we understand and preserve the value of our culture and heritage. Building factories and selling goods are good, but just having a great cultural heritage can make a lot of money and promote the excellence of our country to the world.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Steve! Your answer is fantastic! However, don’t forget to double-check
your spelling.
- Debbie
a. a tour of historic sites in Europe
b. a relaxing stay at a beach resort in Southeast Asia
c. going on safari in Africa
I\'d like to choose a tour of historic sites in Europe.
>> This is a good sentence.
Because I\'ve been to some coutries in Europe on business trip a dacade ago.
>> It\'s because I went to some countries in Europe for business trips a decade ago.
Back then, I had an awesome and friutful time.
>> Back then, I had an awesome and fruitful time.
What I was surprised most was so many cultural heritage in Europe and so many tourists from acoss the world to see them.
>> What I was surprised with the most were the cultural heritage in Europe and the number of tourists across the world to see them.
I learned why the tourism industry is called a chimney-free industry through my trip to Europe.
I learned why the tourism industry is called a chimney-free industry through my trip to Europe.
>> This is a good sentence.
Seeing countless people flocking to see one painting there with a lot of money and time, I came to look back on how much we understand and preserve the value of our culture and heritage.
>> This is a good sentence.
Building factories and selling goods are good, but just having a great cultural heritage can make a lot of money and promote the excellence of our country to the world.
>> Building factories and selling goods are good, but having a great cultural heritage can make a lot of money and promote the excellence of our country to the world is better.
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