Choose holidays

2024-02-16 · 첨삭 강사 Ara

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I choose \'A relaxing stay at a beach resort\'. Because, touring an ancient civilization is not a rest. And shopping in a busy city will be tired, because it will be many people in there. So, beach resort is a good place to rest. I need to be quiet and it should really able to rest on holidays. I can see a lot of marine animals and relax while looking at the beach. The slow wave and warm weather will be nice. These are the reasons why I choose \'A relaxing stay at a beach resort\'.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! You\'re doing great with your homework submissions. 
Here are a few corrections to improve clarity and grammar:
Sincerely,
^^ T. Ara


I choose \'A relaxing stay at a beach resort\'.
>>> CORRECT!!
Because, touring an ancient civilization is not a rest.
>>> Because touring an ancient civilization is not a rest. 
And shopping in a busy city will be tired, because it will be many people in there.
>>> And shopping in a busy city will be tiring, because there will be many people there. 
So, beach resort is a good place to rest.
>>> So, a beach resort is a good place to rest. 
I need to be quiet and it should really able to rest on holidays.
>>> I need it to be quiet and I should really be able to rest on holidays.
I can see a lot of marine animals and relax while looking at the beach.
>>> CORRECT!!
The slow wave and warm weather will be nice.
>>> The slow waves and warm weather will be nice. 
These are the reasons why I choose \'A relaxing stay at a beach resort\'.
>>> CORRECT!!


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