choose one.
학생이 쓴 원문
I think you can guess my answer based on last class.
Of course, I choose the latter one.
The high salary is important for life.
But, life quality is important as well.
The high salary makes me happy for a short time.
Whereas staying with family or feiends makes me happy for a long time.
In addition, I can take a rest and feel refreshed in this time.
So in my opinion, money is necessity but high salary is not.
And famliy and friends are based on life.
강사 첨삭
Happy Tuesday [이름]!
Again, thank you for your time in making your homework.
Family comes first in everything we do.
Money can be tempting sometimes but we should always priotize what really makes us happy.
Here are some corrections I made for you.
See you later!
-- T. Giselle ^^
I think you can guess my answer based on last class.>> Correct.Of course, I choose the latter one.>> Correct.The high salary is important for life.>> Having a high salary is important in life.But, life quality is important as well.>> But the quality of life is important as well.The high salary makes me happy for a short time.>> High salary can make me happy for a short time.Whereas staying with family or feiends makes me happy for a long time.>> Correct. (Spelling check: friends)In addition, I can take a rest and feel refreshed in this time.>>Correct. So in my opinion, money is necessity but high salary is not.>> So in my opinion, money is a necessity but having a high salary is not. And famliy and friends are based on life.
>> Correct. (Spelling check: family)
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