Christmas
학생이 쓴 원문
I haven\'t gone to my hometown in Christmas for a few years. I was thinking how our family had celebrated at Christmas when I was young. Our parents are Christian so whenever at christmas we went to church together.Of course like the other normal family, We enjoyed a good food and sometimes went to a short trip after going church. As I was young, I had wanted having a phone and Surprisingly, My parents gave a new phone as a Christmas gift for me.
강사 첨삭
Hi John!
We celebrate Christmas the same way.
It\'s an important time for the whole family.
Let\'s share more Christmas stories in class.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I haven\'t gone to my hometown in Christmas for a few years.
>> I haven\'t gone to my hometown on Christmas for a few years.
I was thinking how our family had celebrated at Christmas when I was young.
>> I keep thinking of how our family had celebrated Christmas when I was young.
Our parents are Christian so whenever at christmas we went to church together.
>> Our parents are Christians so we go to church together on Christmas day.
Of course like the other normal family, We enjoyed a good food and sometimes went to a short trip after going church
>> Of course, like other normal families, we enjoy good food and sometimes, we go on short trips after church.
As I was young, I had wanted having a phone and Surprisingly, My parents gave a new phone as a Christmas gift for me.
>> When I was young, I wanted to get a phone and surprisingly, my parents gave me the same as a Christmas gift.
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