Christmas on 2017

2017-12-26 · 첨삭 강사 Dianne

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This Christmas was pretty glommmy.I played a lot but it was not fun.I went to chruh and had acting and watch performance.I practiced a lot for play.And it was wonderful.After going church and I watched movie.It was with God.It was not very fantastic.But the content of with God is special.But I don't believe revive at the movie.And I had a nice dinner with my aunt,too.It was good Christmas but it was gloomy Christmas.I know why this Christmas was gloomy.My thought became grown up than before.And I know what I'm looking forward to ____ ___ _____..............

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!


You think more mature nowadays.

Maybe you had a different point of view about life.

Is it the reason why you became silent as well?

I hope not. It\'s better for you to be expressive.

But I\'m happy with the change.


_Teacher Dianne ^^


This Christmas was pretty glommmy.

>> This Christmas was pretty gloomy.

I played a lot, but it was not fun.

>> correct

I went to chruh and had acting and watch performance.

>> I went to the church and had acting. I also watched a performance.

I practiced a lot for play.And it was wonderful.

>> I practiced a lot for the play and the outcome was wonderful.

After going church and I watched movie.It was with God.

>> After going to the church, I watched a movie about God.

It was not very fantastic.But the content of with God is special.

>> It was not very fantastic, but the content about God is special.

But I don\'t believe revive at the movie.

>> But I don\'t believe in reviving someone in the movie.

And I had a nice dinner with my aunt,too.

>> I also had a nice dinner with my aunt.

It was good Christmas but it was gloomy Christmas.

>> It was a good Christmas, but it was also a gloomy Christmas.

I know why this Christmas was gloomy.

>> correct

My thought became grown up than before.

>> I think I became more mature now than before.

And I know what I\'m looking forward to ____ ___ _____..............

>> And I know what I\'m looking forward to is to be a grown up man.

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