Christmas weekend

2016-12-27 · 첨삭 강사 Megan

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This Christmas, I spent some quality time with my friends and family. Me and my wife invited my colleague and his wife, a friend of my wife's and her husband to dinner at our home on this saturday. they picked up pizza and sushi, we prepared cakes and something to drink. We had a lot of fun together as we're all early 30s, and newly weds. Espacially we feel empathy each other for conflict between a newly married people. One of most important thing is to acknowledge each other in married life. I also realized that listening to my wife is better way than insisting. And next day, our family went to eat the Korean dishes at the restaurant nearby Gangnam. What people like to eat was called "Barley dried fish" famous for its special taste among the Korean people also. It taste a bit salty, and delicate roasted flavor. and other dishes of courses are excellent also. I really appreciated that I had a great time to spend with my friends and families.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] (^_^)


Let me share some ideas I love about Christmas!


Christmas is best enjoyed when it isn\'t centered on decorations, gifts, or festivities, but when love is at its core. Love is the essence of Christmas. Christmas should mean taking quality time with your family and friends. It\'s about cherishing and celebrating the love you share.


Christmas is a time to renew bonds of love. It\'s a wonderful time when loved ones can show appreciation for each other. It\'s also a great time to use that love to build bridges of understanding, acceptance, and forgiveness.


~Teacher Megan~


This Christmas, I spent some quality time with my friends and family.
>> Correct.


Me and my wife invited my colleague and his wife and a friend of my wife\'s and her husband to dinner at our home on this Saturday.
>> Correct.


They picked up pizza and sushi, we prepared cakes and something to drink. We had a lot of fun together as we\'re all early 30s, and newly weds.
>> Correct.


 Especially we feel empathy each other for conflict between a newly married people.
>> Especially, we empathize with each other regarding the conflicts between newly married couples.


One of most important thing is to acknowledge each other in married life.
One of the most important lesson I learned in my married life is to acknowledge each other.


I also realized that listening to my wife is better way than insisting.
>> Correct.


And next day, our family went to eat the Korean dishes at the restaurant nearby Gangnam.
>> BETTER SAY: And the next day, our family went out and ate Korean dishes at a restaurant nearby Gangnam.


What people like to eat was called \"Barley dried fish\" famous for its special taste among the Korean people also.
>> The dish people like to eat is called \"Barley dried fish\" famous for its special taste among the Korean people.


 It taste a bit salty, and delicate roasted flavor. and other dishes of courses are excellent also.
>> It taste a bit salty with a delicate roasted flavor and the other dishes are also excellent.


 I really appreciated that I had a great time to spend with my friends and families.
>> BETTER SAY: I am really thankful that I had a great time with my friends and families.

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