Civil War In Afghanistan
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Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your thought on the civil war in Afganistan? (Taliban)
I actually don\'t know much about the civil war in Afghanistan.
But I know many about Taliban.
The Taliban is an Islamic militant political group formed in Afghanistan.
In Afghanistan, Taliban and Afghanistan&US had a war.
But Taliban won so many people is trying to escape Afghanistan.
I think Taliban is not so good group. Because of Taliban, civil wars began!
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Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your thought on the civil war in Afganistan? (Taliban)
I actually don\'t know much about the civil war in Afghanistan.
>> CORRECT ~~
>> OR: I must admit that I don\'t know much about the civil war in Afghanistan.
But I know many about Taliban.
>> But I know a lot about the Taliban.
The Taliban is an Islamic militant political group formed in Afghanistan.
>> CORRECT ~~
In Afghanistan, Taliban and Afghanistan&US had a war.
>> In Afghanistan, the Taliban and Afghanistan & the US had a war.
But Taliban won so many people is trying to escape Afghanistan.
>> But the Taliban won so many people are trying to escape from Afghanistan.
I think Taliban is not so good group. Because of Taliban, civil wars began!
>> I think the Taliban is not a good group as the civil war has begun because of them.
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